forum Critique my protagonist Please

Started August 31, 2018 by Deleted user

tune

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Here is the link to her character:

Here Is the link to the story if you want some context of what she is like. If you want you can start on chapter two.
https://storybird.com/chapters/emerys-journey/1/

I think you need to change the privacy settings on your girl. I can't access her.

Your story is definitely enticing. I like the whole idea. There are some points that could use some fleshing out, but I really do enjoy it.

Sorry about that @Fyrebirdhere is the correct link.

It's pretty vague. She seems like a good character, but you should ideally have more than one-word answers for your responses.