forum Critique my MC please!
Started by @DaemonFeatheredWings
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what you have as mannerisms are more personality traits. mannerisms are more like things she does when she's nervous or tired, so repeating actions caused by an emotion or state.
her temper is bad, so how is she so nice to everyone? also having a strict and easily broken temper shouldn't be her only flaw. what are some traits of hers that might annoy other characters??
as for her prejudices, is she afraid or hateful of citizens living wherever demonia is?
for talents, what does she like to do? can she sew or draw well? does she enjoy math problems? sports? etc. magic can be a talent, but she should have some things she likes to do in her spare time.
politics is more her political belief rather than the one she's part of. how does she feel about the monarchy?
how does she have those pets? do they exist in the same habitats in her world?
she hasn't got a backstory yet unfortunately but i would rlly recommend writing anythin down in those sections.