forum Critique my main gorl?

Started September 12, 2019 by @Rover3672

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I know its vague and a little basic but having some opinions on Ember would be spicy

Be as harsh as you want or ask any questions since I can make things confusing sometimes lol

https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/787418#!

Try it now and if it doesn't work then welp

Hello! I have a couple of questions for you…

1) Under the category "Motivations", it says they vary from instance to instance. Are they always good motivations? or is she sometimes driven by her own jealousy?

2) Under the category "Hobbies", it says she collects rocks and bark. What does she do with/ where does she keep the rocks and bark? (This doesnt have to be relavent to your character, but it is nice to know -> creates a more personal connection b/t the reader and the character ; )

3) Under the category "Favorite Animal", it says her fav. animal is a bird. Is there a reason why its a bird?

4) Under the two categories "Weaknesses" and "Talents" it says she needs help with magic and weapons, but is really good with hand to hand combat. Who was her mentor? Does she have someone experienced that is training her in magic? let alone anyone at all?

Thats all for now…. I hope this helps. Overall, I really love your character!!!!!

Thank you it means so much to me for you to say that you like her! Here are the answers to those questions btw:

1)Motivations: She is one of the good guys in my story so her motivations are mostly good unless she intends to cause harm (which she doesn't do unless its like a prank or something)

2)Lets say of she had fun time at the beach with her family, Ember might take some part of the beach like a rock or shell so it helps her remember what happened that day.

3) For the birds, she likes them because she finds the idea of flying pretty cool, like I had mentioned in parts of her descriptions, she likes stunts and would find it amazing.

4) Most of the time in my story, she doesn't really use magic because it was so powerful and overwhelming for her. She just stopped training regularly and focused on non-magical training. At first her parents taught her but near the end she gets Burn, (the other fire dragon knight) as a mentor.

I didn't really need to respond but I hope this clears some stuff up!

: )