forum Critique my main character please!

Started March 10, 2018 by @@Rubyjane

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This is Markus, enjoy!! I welcome anyone's constructive criticism Markus Lane Hill

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So sorry! I fixed it.

I think he's really cool. You've fleshed him out a lot, and it shows. The little details really shine through. My only concern is the color of his eyes, actually. Is it common in his world to have rainbow/strange colored eyes? Otherwise, I would leave that out and stick with hazel. It seems just a tad extra/ Mary Sueish (or in this case, Gary Stuish) to give him weird colored eyes. Of course, this is irrelevant if strange eye colors are the norm in your universe. Otherwise, he seems great! Good job.

Thank you so much!! I worked really hard on him. In my world any color eyes are the norm, his are a bit uncommon but its actually completely necessary to the plot, lol

Oh, okay! As long as it has a purpose and it's not too crazy I think you're good. :3

Thanks again!!