forum Critique My Ladies?

Started July 13, 2018 by @Lightningclaw13 group

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You don't have to critique all of them, just do as many as you'd like! Thank you in advance!
Ayana: Ayana {Baker} Bowyer
Fjola: Fjola
Jasmine: Jasmine {Whitbread} Granger
Karla: Karla Smith-Bowyer
Lily: Lily {Trueman} Bowyer
Talia: Talia Swift

ayana- very well written character, may be a little young for a strong fighting character, but that will only add to the story

fjola- nice character, feels like an aunt type of

jasmine- she is a very relatable character

karla- well rounded, full of detailes

lily- honorable character, readers will be excited to see this character grow

talia- tough, intimating character

overall well rounded characters, and story line. height and weight relating to age is extremely accurate.

@"Suga Lover"
Thank you so much!
One thing though, Ayana only really fought once. Even then, she just distracted while her mother did the real work. Oh and I'm kinda surprised you thought Talia was intimidating.
Again, thank you!

The only reason Talia seemed intimidating is of her appearance, (which can make a bigger impression then personality sometimes) her scars, burns and muscles and how she always has at least on hand on her hip.

Oh, I kinda see it now.
Again, thanks for the critique!