I'd appreciate if someone could take the time to look through Holly's page for me! I understand that some of the references to her world and her friends won't make any sense since they have no context. Sorry about that. Really all you need to know is that she's a witch living in a dimension called Arkadia that exists on a separate plane of reality from Earth–almost like a sheet over top of the planet, imperceivable by normal humans.
But anyways, don't be afraid to be harsh on me! I can take it! Thanks to anyone who gives it a go! I appreciate any advice given :3 Invalid Character
I'll probably list her page back on private once I get one or two critiques.
Great character! Only one thing that I would suggest changing; I understand tall and thin but 115 lbs is worryingly thin, underweight even, for someone that tall. I get accused of being too thin at that weight and I'm barely 5'3. Try adding an extra 10-20 lbs, it would allow her to still fit the "tall and thin" category without it being a danger to her health.
Thanks! And yeah I think I see what you mean ^^
Tbh i only chose that weight because that's how much I weigh (im 5'6") and idk whats normal for other girls haha. Thanks for the advice! I'll change that ^^
I think she’s great! You developed her fully and it seems like you put a lot of thought into her. For future reference, I find that searching up ‘average weight for a 5’6” 17 year old girl’ helps a lot! (That was just an example lol)
i. love her? she's really well-developed and i love her personality
also the other things that the comments have said already would def help
Over all she's great very details. I can see that a ton of thought went into this. I have a question, are readers gonna she her parents in any way. Like flash back s or anything. What were her parents like from her perspective, how was she when her parents died. I don't know, those are just things I would like to know more about. Other than that she is amazing. I wish you well in your writing journey with her.
@raven
Thank you! And yeah, those are details I should probably add soon ^^
Update! Holly's info is now on private again! Thanks to all who gave me feedback <3
