forum Critique My Gals?

Started July 14, 2018 by @Lightningclaw13 group

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You don't have to critique all of them, just do as many as you'd like! Thank you in advance!
Ayana: Ayana {Baker} Bowyer
Fjola: Fjola
Jasmine: Jasmine {Whitbread} Granger
Karla: Karla Smith-Bowyer
Lily: Lily {Trueman} Bowyer
Talia: Talia Swift

I looked at Jasmine, and overall she had a very good description. Although, she should have a reason for being optimisic about her past. Also, we don't really need to know her bra size. Also, could you give Fjola a pronounciation? And, nobody really cares about bra sizes. Lily is ok,but I'm beginning to see a pattern here. You have a lot of characters with either partial or full blindness, or back problems. Also, none of your characters seem to have opposite-sex attractions. Overall, nice characters.

@Annika Thank you!
I added why Jasmine's optimistic about her past. I added this in but Fjola is pronounced f-y-oh-l-ah.
The only reason I have the bra sizes there is for reference when I and other people draw them. (I'm really bad at different body types)
I never really noticed. I did retract Fjola having back problems. I only have one character (Lily) who's is completely blind. Even then she wasn't born like that so she had to learn how to cope with the loss of her sight. Only Talia and Jasmine were actually born with one blind eye. Karla's partially blind in her left eye and can only really see what's directly in front of her in that eye. With her left eye, she can tell figures, shapes and light and shadow but not really details.