forum Critique My Demon Bab
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@Grace<3

Hello @Lightningclaw13
Lets take a look~
First of all, I must say I really love the pictures you have of your character, did you draw them? :D I love when people have actual designs for their OCs! If you did draw them, then you're really good!
Ok I have a little critique for your character. First of all, I think everything you have is a good start, but just give us more details. Flesh out his personality as much as you can and go beyond just listing traits. Also, you said that he as a mental disorder called IED, but you don't explain it much. Maybe you can give us more details about how it effects his life, personality, and relationships.
I think what you have written for Xylas is a great start :) Just add more details/description of his personality and you'll be good to go!
Happy writing,
Grace <3

@Lightningclaw13 group

@Grace<3
I did draw them, thank you! All of the art is drawn by me.
I'm still writing the story for them so more of their personality and the mental disorder will be explained in that! I try to put some general traits and slowly kinda build off that. I'll probably come back over time and fix things.
Thank you for the critique!