forum Critique my character please?

Started March 15, 2018 by @lilyebee

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She's just for a short story I'm writing but I had fun planning her. Let me know what you think! And also I posted the library she falls into under the location chat so if you want critique that too! Thanks!

Hi! (Yo, I'm so sorry if that's coming on too strong, I just don't know how to start conversations so I'll just start. I'm sorry if I seem rude.)
-For mannerisms, it's a bit vague, so if you wanna add in a few more like "bite lower lip when nervous" or other things. For the two that you have there are they, like, subconscious or does she do them when it's awkwardly quiet or..?
-So you have really good motivations, but what, in turn, does she do because of them?
That's all really. You have an amazing backstory and the art is gorgeous. That's a short story I'd like. I don't know if it's just a personal thought or something, but the murder thing seems really heavy and you could carry it on as a mystery if you're into that. I don't know, tho. I digress. I really like her though. Good luck with your writing!

@getroastytoastymrmcghosty Thanks so much! You didn't seem rude haha, I'll be sure to add to her mannerisms, and yeah her backstory is a big part of the character I just don't know how to incorporate it into the story yet, if you have any ideas lmk! Thanks again!