forum Critique my character! Please!

Started July 25, 2018 by Arosepetal

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Hi, Can someone critique my character please! Invalid Character

It's a bit vague, but I think she is a great character to start with

@NoValdezinator Ok,Thanks

She's cool! I'd use better physical description, maybe? The skin color part was pretty confusing. How can someone be pale and tan at the same time? This source might be helpful: http://writingwithcolor.tumblr.com/post/96830966357/writing-with-color-description-guide-words-for (it deals mainly with skin tones for people of color, but it may help with clearer description). Also, listing a character's flaws is usually helpful, because no one is perfect. Other than that, it's pretty good!

Ok, I'll use it thx!

Overall, I think Kora needs a strong motivation that can give her direction throughout the story. Especially since she's the main character, her motivation needs to move the story in the right direction. Her background could also be built on so you can have a better idea of who she is. How does she like her life? How does her past effect who she is now? From her background you also might get more of an idea of what her motivations are looking like.
Hope this helped! Happy writing!