forum Critique my character Megan

Started February 09, 2018 by Sandra Renee Melton

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Hi! I'm no professional, but I'd gladly give you my thoughts! For one, I really like Megan! She has a very sad, interesting backstory and I'd definitely love to read and see how her character grows and develops along the way. But now, for critique!
I think she may be a little overweight for a woman at 5'4", unless of course she's supposed to be! There's absolutely nothing wrong with that! Just maybe add that to her "Body Type" section. Also, maybe be a bit more specific with her hair. By, "She doesn't really style her hair in any fashion," did you mean she leaves it down, or changes it day-to-day with no particular pattern or favoritism for one style? Is is curly, straight, or wavy? How long is it? Also, perhaps use "Unruly" and "Messy" to describe her hair since she doesn't brush her hair/has bedhead. Details like that will make it easier to picture her!
All in all, I think adding more details in everything will help a lot! Does she hate homework because it's hard for her, or just because she thinks it's boring and a waste of time (that could be spent cooking and making skirts)? Is she aware she's good at singing? Is she embarrassed when someone hears her sing? When you say she wants a "stable home" does that include a husband? Or does she hold a grudge against men for what happened in her past? Why does she think that necklace came from her mother? John considers her as a daughter, but does she think of him as a father?
I hope I helped in some way!

Thank you