I'd be really grateful if somebody were to critique my character Rie! Here's the link; Rie Katayama. One of the things I'd like you to look out for as you're critiquing is if my character's personality is under developed. Other than that, happy critiquing!
whoa, she's freaking mUSCULAR AND SUPER TALL I LOVE IT. anyways sorry the gay in me came out a bit whoops. the hair colour is intriguing, I adore the detail in the style, and facial hair. silver eyes are awesome and good contrast against the dark hair. FANTASTIC MANNERISMS WOW. JUST WOW. oh my gosh, I honestly don't think I can find anything that can really be improved (as my fourth-grade English teacher always said: nothing can be perfect but sometimes it's better to leave things as they are, don't ask me why I still remember that). wow, I've just gotten down to the education and I'm already in love with her I've been speed reading this because I need all of these amazing details in my head nowwww. I am actually suffering oh my gosh this is amazing where do I buy 10 copies of this book
Thank you so much! If you'd like, I'm working on a story about Rie's background I could share it with you if you'd like to see it.
I would love to read it
I'll send it to you as soon as it's finished!
Here's the link to the story, it's still not finished, but I think you'll be able to see it as i go. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gCbrO_-ZUEnFnXXc8Tt077IBnMuocsQaxgoHFqQ_uTI/edit?usp=sharing