forum Critique my character?

Started May 12, 2019 by Deleted user

tune

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Thanks!

Hi! The only major critique that I would like to point out is to maybe give her some flaws (because everyone has at least one flaw and it makes your character feel more real). Besides that, she seems very overpowered when it comes to her magic (which isn't always a bad thing, but it is something to keep in mind when creating a character). Perhaps you could create a flaw in her magic? It could be something along the lines of a weakness that she has that connects to her backstory; maybe the fire that she was exposed to as a child damaged her magic somehow, causing her to not be able to bring out the full potential of her magic.

However, these are just suggestions and if you don't want to use them, that is perfectly fine (after all, she is your character). I really enjoyed reading about Ciara; she was a pretty interesting character! Keep up the good work, hun!

@thatoneartist Thanks for the feedback! I've been struggling with the flaw part for a while; I was considering doing something where exposure to elemental powers (since those are considered the classics there and are extremely powerful with training) can temporarily disable her magic.