forum Critique my character

Started July 04, 2018 by @n o s t r a d a m u s location_city

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Be as mean as you want. There is some context in the history section, but I'm still ironing out the details of my setting, so it is slightly vague. I try my best to make my characters as realistic as possible, so if you se any problems with her, call it out. Thx :)

1. Maybe look into adding a few more things to mannerisms? Personally, I like talking about how the character walks, how they sit, how they carry themselves, that sort of thing. It tends to fit best in this category.
2. Flaws- why does she go along with bad ideas? Is she gullible? Is she too agreeable and doesn't like to argue with anyone?
3. Personality- just from the way it's formatted, it looks like a lot describes the ENTP, and not necessarily Lizzie. Correct me if I'm wrong. MBTI is a wonderful place to start, but she needs more qualities, and I also felt like there was a lack of what one might consider "good" qualities (although it may be how you worded it, now that I'm looking at it? If you think it's working out fine, just ignore this part of the critique.)
4. Not a critique, just me being curious. What does Atom Manipulation do exactly? (Although make sure it's not OP)
   Overall, she seems like a good character, and you've done some excellent work! Sorry I critique a lot, I just like to give people a lot to work with, and the things I brought up here are not big flaws, just small things that can be fine-tuned. I also like the world you've created so far!

Thanks @Becfromthedead . With the MBTI, the point I'm sort of trying to make is that her behaviours are often contradictory, making her almost like a judgemental puppy dog. Too many people try to make their characters traits fit together, and it comes off as unrealistic, like writing a character as a stereotype. Another thing people do is accidentally make their characters perfect, and when they get feedback its normally things like their characters feeling flat, so they add in absolutely ridiculous flaws that make the character seem manic. I personally like to classify characters by MBTI so that they seem more realistic, and so that I can make my profiles and descriptions quicker. MBTI just provides flaws that fit realistically, but don't seem cookie cutter or obvious.
Also atom manipulation is pretty much what it is titled as, think of it as witchcraft just with a scientific description. Users can change the structure and form of atoms (essentially what the atom makes elementally, and its final shape and size), and can pretty much do anything. Teleport - you bet you, that's just re-assembling the atoms that make up you some where else. That sort of thing.
Thanks for the critique, I hope I clarified some things.

Okay, that justification for MBTI works. She definitely does seem pretty well-rounded for the most part. You certainly did a good job making sure she wasn't perfect or any sort of Mary Sue.
And nice, so sort of similar to explanations for alchemy?