forum critique my character
Started by Amstance
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barabara

My one major suggestion is to give Astor flaws that connect with her strengths and talents. For example, you say in her flaws that she's easily angered. This anger could drive her and make her a hard-working person. Finding ways for the talents to connect to the flaws make a more complex character. Another thing to consider is writing how her motivations change as she changes throughout the story. This would also add to her personality.

@Raziel Gallephraya

one of the things i would suggest changing are the motivations since they're what really sets a lot of characters aside from one another. you should add more or give her something to fight for. if you don't want to do this you should consider elaborating on the kind of "love" that motivates her. i'm not going to say anything about the flaws because the person above has already explained what you could do to fix them. the angry fireball personality and social anxiety can either go together amazingly or make a confusing character, be careful about how you write her because if you write her in the wrong way it could make the audience very confused about who the character is supposed to be. for the politics, is she completely democratic or does she share some views with other parties? add more to the background or to notes!!! you could include how she got her social anxiety in the background or explain some parts of her character because literally everything about a character has to have some reason behind it!!!!! you could add more random facts or experiences or just whatever you want about her or her friends in your notes and it really gives a more solid explanation of the character!!! anyways i hope i helped point you in the right direction at least a little bit but overall i'm actually pretty excited to see who she turns out to be!!