I'm hoping to get some feedback on one of my characters for a story I'm currently doing major Worldbuilding in. I'd love for some critiques on him, his story(what I have of it so far) and maybe ask me some questions that I can address and use to develop him even more!
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I would go into a bit more detail with the skin tone and body type. How light or tanned is he? Does he keep a tan? Does he have any distinguishing features like freckles, vitiligo, or something similar? And what type of athletic figure? Depending on the type of exercise you do that can mean being lean, muscular, or a mix. Most people have at least some muscular feature if they exercise very much. The reference pictures explain this but I think it's good to have a really detailed description so that when you have to write it in the actual story you can really make the image vivid. I'd also add a little more detail to the flaws just so it evens everything out a bit. What makes him manipulative? Is it intentional? Does he feel bad about being that way? And so on for the other flaws. Overall this is a really good character and an amazing plot. As someone who mainly does modern day, normal world set stories the dystopian/fantasy elements to this are amazingly developed.
@Garbage Thanks so much for the feedback! I'll be sure to edit and add some more details into the shorter descriptions. I'm actually working this story into a comic since I'm not the best at writing myself, but being able to paint a clear picture of a character through text is important too :) I'm glad you find the plot enjoyable though, that's great to hear! Thanks again for your time
I think he needs a more daunting flaw, like a phobia or something, I don't know I prefer characters with more flaws that physically hold them back, I think it helps them develop and be more relatable.
I think he needs a more daunting flaw, like a phobia or something, I don't know I prefer characters with more flaws that physically hold them back, I think it helps them develop and be more relatable.
That makes sense. Giving him a phobia of some sort never really occurred to me. I think a fear that would fit him would be fear of failure? I'm not sure but I'll keep your critique in mind! Thank you!