Would anyone like to give me some help with this gal? So this character is one I'm hoping to make into a really interesting piece in my plot, since she's kind of a half villain half good person. I want her to be that game changing piece in the puzzle that no one expects. I know she has a bit of a confusing background, but I can clarify things here if you get lost. Any help is appreciated; thanks so much!Brooklyn Davidson
It's set to private
If you make the page public I'd be happy to give her a look
Oh ok sorry! I've only just started using this program:) Thank you!
I think that will work
Alrighty
Personally, I think that the entire "Looks" section is a little bland. Like yeah, I can understand what Brook looks like, but I can't really SEE her, you know? Try giving a little more description overall on how she looks.
"The world hasn't treated her well, so why should she treat it well"
It hasn't? How so? You mention a couple times that she had a rough childhood but you never explain how. Character sheets not only are supposed to tell you about the generalization of the character, but how they got there. I'd recommend going into a lil more detail in the "Background" section for that. (And maybe also explain the type of story she's in and why she'd need a bow & arrow)
FLAWS: in a nutshell, she's independent to the point of overconfidence, she has a snarky and sarcastic attitude, she's indecisive about her role in the story, and she's not trusting
Now don't get me wrong, I think those are great and somewhat original flaws for your character, but how did she get there? Why is she like that? What in her past led her to be untrusting or independent? It's always important to let the audience know why a character acts a certain way. I'll use something out of one of my character sheets as an example, "Her social anxiety, and lack of guidance as a child, has led her to be very blunt and direct in her manner with speech. She has no idea how to ease into conversations and most of the time won't even realize when she's said something hurtful"
Other than that there's really not much wrong with her. I personally like the idea of someone being stuck between good and bad.
Ok! Thank you so much! That was really really helpful, and I think I will be able to develop her a lot better now! I will definitely work on the background section, explain it more detail, and work on her looks as well! It's always so eye opening to see a second opinion on a character, and I think the things you pointed out were what seemed like it was missing from her! :)
Yeah no problem
After you add to her I'd be happy to give her another look
What do you think of my character? https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/880777#looks_panel i'm sorry, there is not much detail in the looks section but im struggling to picture her fully.