forum Critique my character?

Started February 09, 2018 by @user2313423

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here's the link- this is also my first time sharing a character, and can someone tell me if anything is wrong with the settings like if its private, or anyone can edit it? thanks.

Sure. First thing I notice is the hairstyle. It cracked me up "some type of medieval hairstyle". Maybe look up a few hairstyles from that era and pick a few favorites. For mannerisms, throw in a few more. Not many people just have one mannerism. For example, I mostly just peel my nails when I'm bored, but when I'm on my phone I purse my lips, etc. More than one mannerism humanizes your character. Motivation wise, it's okay, but tell us why. Why does she want to overthrow the king? What's her motivation for that? For flaws, does she not know what's best for herself? Also, how is being strong a flaw? I think she needs more realistic flaws, like she can't hold her tongue, or she's overbearing, or she speaks before she thinks, or she can be rude? For her personality type, I feel kinda nitpicky, but don't most people break down and feel unspeakable pain when all those things you described happen? Personality type needs to be a little more specific. Maybe say because she's a princess, she feels her people's pain more keenly than most. And since we're on the topic: if she's a princess, politics should be applicable. You don't have to say if she's liberal or republican, but give a loose outline of her world's politics and give her an opinion on it. Lastly, give my girl a backstory!!! Background is the most important part! It's the story of why she is what she is. It basically explains everything else you've put in her character. Backstory!

Okay, that's it, sorry if I was a little nitpicky. I just like her a lot lol. Good job and good luck.

@writelikeyourerunningoutoftime ok thanks, this is really helpful!