forum Critique my blond son
Started by @Blossom_Utonium
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Hi there! I’m here to critique the boy!

  • For appearance, 137 pounds is pretty underweight for a 6’ guy, and since he’s a prince living a pretty rich lifestyle, I would recommend upping the weight at least a bit
  • In his personality, it says that he both doesn’t play well with others and is very charismatic and communicates well. To me, those feel a bit conflicting, so maybe pick one?
  • I like the ‘grinding his teeth’ for a mannerism because it just screams barely concealed stress, which feels on brand for him, but the frequent blushing feels like it may not fit with his princely demeanor. Maybe there’s something I’m missing though?
  • I adore how well-thought-out his prejudices are, and they feel like they fit well! However, may I suggest giving him a secret hobby that he considers “unmanly” but takes pleasure in anyway? It would be a nice and simple way to add some depth to his character, I think!
  • The Reader’s Crown is a great idea for an item, but why does it frustrate him so much? As a charismatic communicator and persuader, it seems like reading minds would be very beneficial for him. Maybe explain that a bit more?

That’s all I really have! Val is a very interesting character, so thank you for giving me the chance to critique him! :)