forum Critique my baby??
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@Riorlyne pets

Andi

  • Overview: I like the nickname! Think about adding how he got it.
  • Looks:
    • Hairstyle: The word you want is 'quiff'. (Queef means something completely different trust me on this you don't want to look it up.)
    • Body type: This is an unusual shape for a guy, but not impossible, and the more muscle the less hourglass-shaped Andi will appear, so keep that in mind.
  • Nature: You can add to mannerisms, prejudices, talents and hobbies - well-developed characters have multiple traits and fleshing out this section of the profile will help a lot toward creating a 3D character.
    • Personality type: What does it mean that Andi uses his ESTP-ness to cover anxiety? Do you mean he pretends to be ESTP? If so, what personality type is he really?
  • Social: Why is Andi's favourite possession a frypan?
  • History: What education did Andi receive? History? Politics? Languages? Dance? Every royal court will have different priorities for what their young people should learn.

You don't need to answer those questions here, but thinking about them may help you develop Andi further.

@Suspicious_Reptiles

I'm sorry but i can't really draw. But I can critique them!
*Andi
-Nature
What else do they do when they’re in different moods? Like what do they do when they’re mad or happy? Who’s Zana? Can you explain, maybe in the notes section, who this is or how they affected their life?
-History
What is their history? Tell me about what they were like as a child, or how they got their job, where or how they met their friends. Things like this are important in shaping a character. What did they learn? Was it book smarts or more like street smarts?

*Quinta
-Overview
Where did she get the nickname?
-Nature
What does she do when she’s sad or excited? Just tell me more about her quirks. I don’t understand what you mean by her prejudice as ‘immediately wants to prove people wrong’. Does she just not like people who call her wrong? Was this supposed to be a flaw?
-Social
What is her view on politics? Why is her favorite possession her shoes?
-History
What did she learn from the tutoring? What is her whole backstory? There really isn’t much here to go off of.

my_name_is_jackweewee_

I'm sorry but i can't really draw. But I can critique them!
*Andi
-Nature
What else do they do when they’re in different moods? Like what do they do when they’re mad or happy? Who’s Zana? Can you explain, maybe in the notes section, who this is or how they affected their life?
-History
What is their history? Tell me about what they were like as a child, or how they got their job, where or how they met their friends. Things like this are important in shaping a character. What did they learn? Was it book smarts or more like street smarts?

*Quinta
-Overview
Where did she get the nickname?
-Nature
What does she do when she’s sad or excited? Just tell me more about her quirks. I don’t understand what you mean by her prejudice as ‘immediately wants to prove people wrong’. Does she just not like people who call her wrong? Was this supposed to be a flaw?
-Social
What is her view on politics? Why is her favorite possession her shoes?
-History
What did she learn from the tutoring? What is her whole backstory? There really isn’t much here to go off of.

Hopefully these have been answered thx for the feedback

my_name_is_jackweewee_

Andi

  • Overview: I like the nickname! Think about adding how he got it.
  • Looks:
    • Hairstyle: The word you want is 'quiff'. (Queef means something completely different trust me on this you don't want to look it up.)
    • Body type: This is an unusual shape for a guy, but not impossible, and the more muscle the less hourglass-shaped Andi will appear, so keep that in mind.
  • Nature: You can add to mannerisms, prejudices, talents and hobbies - well-developed characters have multiple traits and fleshing out this section of the profile will help a lot toward creating a 3D character.
    • Personality type: What does it mean that Andi uses his ESTP-ness to cover anxiety? Do you mean he pretends to be ESTP? If so, what personality type is he really?
  • Social: Why is Andi's favourite possession a frypan?
  • History: What education did Andi receive? History? Politics? Languages? Dance? Every royal court will have different priorities for what their young people should learn.

You don't need to answer those questions here, but thinking about them may help you develop Andi further.

Hopefully these have been answered in the updated version! Feel free to give anymore feedback

@Riorlyne pets

(It's probably not how you imagined her but I sorta drew Quinta ^^)

Also… it might be just me but I can't see any changes on Andi's page?