HI, so I've been doing a lot of these lately and I thought I should post a character of my own! So I offer up for judgement the characters of my ~new~ universe. The universe itself is underdeveloped, but feel free to tear my babies apart!!
(I'm just gonna post all of them, but you can do one or all of them!)
Tally- Natalie Lindbergh
Clara- Clara Lindbergh
Nico- Nico Starling
Be as harsh as you'd like!! :DDD
BEST CHARACTERS EVER
I wish I had some critique to offer u since ur so good at critiquing but i'm so sorry ur characters are amazing. seriously they feel so real and I already like them like their little quirks and flaws are so good and make so much sense?? like u have a reason for why they are what they are and that's important and often overlooked. honestly a+ job and I lowkey (highkey) want to read more about them
Yay! You've been so helpful to me and many others on this site, and I finally get the chance to see some of your stuff! I'm so thrilled! I hope I can offer advice that is as good as you give!
In famous @CinnamonRoll fashion, top down:
Tally:
Everything looks in order for the overview and looks! Awesome job adding in so many descriptors and details for looks, specifically for body and hair type. I have a very clear picture!
Motivations are very solid and work in conjunction with backstory. Everything else on the nature page flows together nicely to create a coherent, believable character.
Social page looks nice! Harvest orange is a great color.
Backstory is very well detailed and intriguing. This is definitely a character I could get invested in easily. My only very minor nip is that the timing of the backstory isn't too clear in terms of space between events. I'm confused as to how long she has now lived on the surface world, working as a runner. Also, how much time elapsed between Clara first trying heroin to becoming physically dependent on it? Clarifying a few of these time intervals will help fit everything together nicely.
Overall, very strong MC! With such a strong leading character, it is easy to see how you give such good advice.
I have to go walk my dog now, but I'll be back to do Clara and Nico, as I am now quite invested in Tally and her story! Can't wait!
Thank you all so much!! @joufflucharlie, I'll try to quantify some of those time intervals–I can easily see how that could throw stuff off. Overall, thank you all for your compliments and critiques!!! :DDD