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@Yamatsu

Sorry. When I made the Universe public, I thought everyone could access the pages listed under that Universe. My bad!

@Alexia

Your character is really well thought out! I really appreciate the detail you went into with his mannerisms, it brought him to life for me as I read through his profile. I did have a couple of notes that I thought might benefit you to expand on; his education is "home schooled" and his occupation is "blacksmith". Perhaps you could go into detail on how he was taught or trained to become a blacksmith. What does he like about being a blacksmith? How does being in that environment fuel his love for weapons? Why does he have this fascination? His favorite animal is "anything furry and huggable", why is that? Is it because he has no hair himself? It's relate-able that he loves his mother's cooking, but what is it about it that he loves; the fact that her hand crafted it, the spices that remind him of home? Just some suggestions, but overall, Yamatsukami the half-dragon is a pretty great character!

@Yamatsu

Thanks! I mostly based him off of myself, so I didn't think to add that much detail in certain areas. This helps out a lot!