forum Character review exchange?

Started October 29, 2018 by @Cassiopeia

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I finally have a profile for my girl Rosemary. If anyone would like to help me out LOADS, could ya review her?? I'll review yours too!
Thanks in advance to anyone reading! <3

This is my main. If you wanna do others, go for it. Adele Marie Cinalianté

Here is my main character number one. I would critique some, but i don’t have time right now to read through anything:(

Rosemary seems to be mostly fairly consistent. The only thing I have to say is that I would be careful to make sure she isn’t too rigid just because I think that would get boring to right after a while. So I would give her some more weaknesses so that she’s slightly more breakable. That’s all really. Of course, if you disagree that’s totally fine; she’s your character.

@Overdoneyanoveltropeyesplease Adele is a very interesting character, I like the details you've included. However, the information you've provided does seem a bit incomplete, like there is torture mentioned, but it isn't mentioned again… This could just be me being a bit picky, but the lack of information in those aspects does bother me a bit. Another thing that does seem a bit incomplete is her fears and insecurities you mention. While it's good you have them, you didn't give much of an explanation for their presence. Like you mentioned she doesn't like 'Snobby people and homophobes'… Is there a certain reason for that? Has someone snobbish or homophobic crossed her personally? Someone close to her? Just something to think about! Overall, she seems like a good character who could use a tad more development in the areas I mentioned. :) Thank you so much for the review on Rosemary~!

Thanks for the insight! I will spend more time on developing her even more