@NobleWolf
But no nitpicking plz (also I don't have the height or weight down yet so just ignore that)
But no nitpicking plz (also I don't have the height or weight down yet so just ignore that)
@NobleWolf hi!
First, mannerisms. Oh boy. What you added there are personality traits, not mannerisms. Mannerisms are about his body language, what makes him stand out, like, does he look away when speaking to others? Does he keep his cool in a stressful situation or does he react in a certain way? What is his body language? Imagine how he'd behave in different situation.
Talents: Speaking? When i first read it, i thought he was able to speak human language, other than normal wolf language, but given the information you provided, you could change that into Story-Telling, since he manages to charm others with his tales and voice.
Besides this, everything else is well done. His motivations are okay, his flaws are good. Overall, his character is pretty well done, just make sure to correct the mannerisms, okay?
Hope it helped!
Thanks for the feedback, I made the necessary changes
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