forum Character Critique?

Started January 20, 2018 by Name

tune

So I'm new and was hoping to get some constructive criticism (harsh is just fine, as long as it stays civil) on my main protagonist? Feel free to ask questions and thank-you in advance! Here's the link to her profile:

Ohh I really like the name first off!!
First off, I'd try and put something more specific for her height and weight, like 5'2 and 115 or something. But Of course it is your character so you don't have to do that, just a suggestion~~
And for her body type, you can add more things besides just how curvy she is! You could possibly put something like 'short legs' or 'no muscles' or things like that!
Good mannerisms! They really help put the characters personality together!
I'm not sure if you got the prejudices mixed up or if she just hates everything she is lol. A prejudice is something that someone is against even if they have no experience with it. Like one of my characters has a prejudice against males and believes they are all jerks except for a special three or four because most guys she has every met were extremely rude to her!
Her hobbies are so good! I found it slightly funny that you mentioned she can force the water not to drown her and thinks its funny. I believe that small details like that really shape a character more than a lot of big things!
Nice backstory too! It really explained a lot I was wondering about at first! So good job, that is what backstories are supposed to do!

just a question because everyone took the good comments, the super hero name, is it based off ready player one?

also because i didn't notice earlier his nick name should have quote marks.

Thank-you for all the suggestions! I've made updates and clarifications on her profile. Her name is not a reference to anything, at least not intentionally. If anyone else has some feedback I would love to hear more! Here's her profile again: