forum Character Critique?
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@Grace<3

Hello~ lets take a look :D
first of all, I think you may have his weight wrong. A 6'2 dude weighs a lot more than 120 pounds; my character is a 5'3 girl who weighs that much. He should weigh around 150-190 pounds.
His motivation makes me so sad :( But I love it! Very unique and interesting, I have actually never seen that motivation on this site before.
One of his flaws is he starves himself :( This seems like anorexia, which could explain him being underweight. If he actually does have anorexia, you should mention it somewhere and explain how it affects him.
I like his personality and history, but add more :D Really flesh his personality out with details and quirks :)
Also, explain his prejudices more. Tell us why he dislikes those groups of people :)
Overall, I like Dmitri :D He's such a sad boy and I want to give him a hug.
Grace <3

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Thank you that really helps me a lot. I always felt like something was missing with him.