forum Character Advice

Started February 02, 2018 by @mistress-0f-n0ne

tune

I have created a new character, you might want to read up on the universe to perhaps make more sense of the situations but, feel free to tell me what works and what doesn't!

I'll have a go at her!

Ok, first, other names are like nicknames and you just put her normal name there. I can think of a few nicknames already for her. Like, Lou. Another thing, she is underweight a bit! The average weight of a 5'7 female is 125-150 lbs! And for her identifying marks, they would be like 'has a scar on her shoulder' or 'has a tattoo on her thigh' or something like that! Oooh you mention something about zombie infestation? And you also mention her being in a simulation or something like that. Explain more! You can through us in and then expect us to know everything without an explanation lol :D She doesn't have an occupation? But you said she was a G.A.M.E.S participant and scout… wouldn't that be a occupation? I think everything is good so far! Good job and good luck!

Thank you so much for your advice! I intentionally made her underweight since…in an apocalypse food is definitely a scarce commodity here. But as for the G.A.M.E.S, it's…it's a very very long explanation actually. I will put a note on it for people to read and understand

She seems cool. Overview and looks are fine… but I'm kinda confused about her flaws. ADHD and PTSD are not personality flaws. if u want to include that information put it in personality type I guess. just flaws seems a little weird. Also in background u say that she's the only survivor (in the simulation) but in the prejudice section u say she's wary of other survivors. kinda confusing. However I do love the background. interesting premise and very well thought out. overall I really like her character. good job

When I say other 'survivors' I don't mean that literally. Most of those 'survivors' were people found guilty of treason and sent into simulations to be executed. Hence why Louise would be wary of them. To her they were hostile people, when in reality they were criminals waiting for an execution. Thank you for the advice my friend!