forum Can you critique this character?
Started by @sharkfinn_ey
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@GoblinKing

I’ll give it a shot!

First, what is his last name? Does he have one? Appearance-wise, he’s good, but I think that carrying a lighter would fall more into mannerisms than identifying marks.

His bag sounds heavy! Glass isn’t exactly light, and neither are whetstones. How big is this bag? Is it a backpack?

The fact that he burns himself accidentally isn’t a flaw as much as a mannerism, I think. You could place all of his burns into the identifying marks, something like that is very recognizable! But you’re right, the fact that he cries when he gets emotional isn’t really a flaw, imho. That could honestly just be a part of his normal personality.

As for his prejudice.. man, that’s a fun one. Are there exceptions or is just a flat rule?

In my experience, having a positive outlook and having a more positive personality tend to go hand in hand. If this is the case, why doesn’t he let the small things get him down? The personality you’ve described doesn’t read as a man who doesn’t have a positive outlook. Having Big Dick Energy and being as unconfident as you’ve described him don’t really match!

I love that you’ve changed up his weapon to brass knuckles! Like you said, a scythe can get really cumbersome.

Overall, you’ve done a fine job. His personality is contradictory in some places, but I can definitely see where your thought process went! Good job!