forum Can you critique my character here?
Started by Caboose
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@YourNightmare

So I was looking at your character, in my opinion I love it. He seems really cool. I just have some questions, does he have control when he teleports at random? If he doesn't does that affect him going to school? Does anyone know that he can teleport? For his body type, I would be a little more descriptive because when you say that he's thin, I just see like a thin kind of scrawny kid. He kind of reminds me of Ponyboy and Jonny from the outsiders when you talk about him making connections and staring off. Other than that, he looks great.

Caboose

Everyone knows he can teleport, that's why he has the ankle bracelet, hooked up to a GPS tracker so his parents can find out where he is. Later on he can teleport where he wants when he wants but still teleports at random