forum Can you critique my character?

Started October 23, 2018 by @Oniyuri

tune

I'm not finished with her entire like bio or whatnot but I want to know if it's good so far? Please and thank you!!

I'm liking her so far!
A lot of her description is pretty vague. She looks about twenty, but how old is she really? I'm not really sure if "average" is a good word to use for a body type. People have different statures, body shapes, etc. Be a little more specific with that.
I, personally, would like to know what the "phoenix" race is. But that may be just me.
Good character so far, though!

I agree, I wouldn't go with the word "average" for a body type either. Body shapes and weight and how much muscle/fat a person has can actual help with character development. Some would argue that body shape doesn't matter, but it can be really helpful and sometimes powerful in literature. It helps push your readers to feel a certain way about a character. For example, people with an inverted triangle body shape (wide shoulders, narrow hips) could be seen as more athletic, sometimes outgoing and friendly. People with an hourglass body shape (especially females) can be seen as sexy and confident. The rectangle body shape can show somebody who is serious, possibly introverted. This goes for face shape too (round seen as shy, maybe an outcast, oval seen as average, heart shaped seen as young and innocent). And the words you use to describe these features can give your character personality, even if your character hasn't talked/done anything yet.

Person with a diamond shaped face and a slight widow's peak, sharp chin jutting out and eyebrows arched, thin, bony body void of curves: makes the character sound witchlike, which is giving characterization already

I hope that made sense! Sorry I went off on a rant