forum Can someone please PLEASE Critique My Character??

Started March 25, 2018 by Deleted user

tune

My main character is in progress, but i thinks shes in good shape. I need some Critiqueing
Zoe Zoe Melana

1. She's really good! You've really rounded her out well! The only thing I can think of is she's extremely tall for 13, and and extremely underweight for her height, unless of course she's supposed to be like that being a demigoddess and all. Also some of the mannerisms might fit better in other categories, just in my opinion though. For example, I'd put "NOT A MORNING PERSON" under personality.
2. OMG DID YOU DRAW THAT WTH THAT'S SO GOOD I CAN ONLY DRAW THAT WELL IN MY DREAMS HOLY GUACAMOLE

I agree with @ThiaL. She's very underweight. (I'm 5'4 and 125, which is average, just to give you an idea) I also agree that some of the mannerisms could go under other categories, but if you see "mannerisms" as being more like little quirks, etc that she has, that's fine. She's very detailed, but I think the one place that might need more attention is personality traits. Just so you get a fuller idea of who she is, I recommend that you include at least 10 personality traits, a mixture of good and bad. A lot of her personality came across as more of a what she does rather than who she is. Personally, I think it may be good to add Myers-Briggs typing and moral alignment (though there will be those who oppose that idea) in addition to the things you already have, because from what you've presented, I understand how Zoe acts, but not how she thinks, if that makes any sense.
Overall, your character looks great, and I love the illustration. I'm a bit jealous!

I honestly love the character but I see a few contradictions in her personality. It's really just minor things but you should go back and look at them. That's all, I'm sure Zoe will be an amazing character. Keep up the good work!

She has really good background, but her personality is a little lacking, it is hard to see how she thinks and what makes her tick. It sounds really great and super intriguing.

agreed and its "Post Traumatic"

Ok just to clear things up:

1) I did NOT draw that, i borrowed it from the internet. If I did, GOD I WOULD BE IN VEGAS BOY.
2) Ok from, where im from and looking at your comments, we apparently are tall people especially for people below 13. Now im about 5'6 and im about 96 pounds.
3) Coreth its past trauma not post traumatic because we are talking about past trauma in the past not a disorder.

Also I added 2 learning disorders if you guys wanna take a look. The reason is because shes a greek demigod and they all have that.