forum Can someone PLEASE critique my characters?
Started by @CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa
tune

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Hey! So, I read Otis and Annika, and I think that you plan to write this in Otis' perspective based on what you have down so that I how I will critique you. I think that Annika is, overall, a much more interesting character than Otis. Becuase his entire motivation is to 'blend in', it paints a very bleak image of his character, and I, as the reader, would not want to see more from him. Annika has more conflicting traits, what with her care to be open-minded whilst sticking to Biblical practice. I think a story in her perspective while she helps out her friend Otis and goes through Middle school under very Christian faith would be interesting, whilst I think Otis' story is too overtold to be particularly fascinating without some kind of flair. If I misread anything please tell me, but I think you have good ideas of characters that just need more fleshing out at this point.

Weronika

I like the whole idea, but I think it would make more sense if the characters were a bit older, maybe 14. But everything is great! Good luck with your story :)