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Started December 30, 2019 by Deleted user

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hi im mostly finished with my main character and i need some outside opinions on her plz and thx Invalid Character

Hello! Just had a look at your character. Very creative, with lots of detail and interesting facts. Needs a bit of work done to improve character development, but I'm sure you're working on that. Wish you all the best with her - Jennifox :)

@jennifox Thank you for your feedback! I've worked on her a bit but I'm not the best at character development, so I don't know if I've done it……. well. You can take another look at her if you like!

This is a really interesting character! I think you do a really good job at making her seem like she’s 11 and not like a much older character with a young age slapped on. My only critique is that she feels a little bit like a damsel-in-distress type. Unless there’s plot relevance to her being picked on/abused by people frequently, I would try to add some more positive qualities to her life. Obviously, she should be bothered when bad things happen, but a lot of younger kids don’t fully grasp the connotations of bullying so it wouldn’t have an immediate profound effect. That’s a minor thing, though and it often will kind of die off as you write so it’s not a huge issue!

I like your character! Her personality and backstory seem interesting. The one note I have is she seems kind of perfect. She doesn't have any prejudices, and all her flaws are things about not caring for herself enough, etc. Maybe make her bottle her feelings up so she occasionally has outbursts, make her have a few people she just can't be nice to, or something similar. I may just be misunderstanding the character, but those are my thoughts.

@CrystalDior and corianna thank you both for your feedback. I will definitely keep working on her and take into account what you guys said.