Hi! I hope whoever is reading this is having a good day!
Anyways getting to my point, I need help with my two sisters. I just need advice on how to improve them and make their personalities flow (if that makes any sense haha). Here they are:
Joanna (She's a WIP, right? So I'm not going to go in too much)
Overview:
Overall good, but it's *protagonist.
Looks:
You could explain how she got the scar on her eyebrow.
Nature:
I agree with Kitty writes about the mannerisms. Mannerisms for different emotions really flesh out the characters. What does she do when sad? Angry? Happy? People have so many mannerisms. It's what makes them who they are.
I know you don't have motivations yet, but I tip for when you write them is saying why it motivates them too!
Give her more flaws. People have a lot more flaws than just two.
The talents are okay, but maybe give her a few more and explain how she gained those talents (I mean, not so much handwriting.)
Even if her hobbies are just simple things, list some of them. And explain why she thinks it's interesting!
Personality and mannerisms are actually pretty different. Mannerisms are more so what they do (Like facial expressions, the way they walk, etc.). Personality is more like how they act. You could maybe expand on her personality even if you feel most of her personality falls in the mannerism category. There's always something to be said, so go ahead and say it!
The fears are okay.
Why does the song you have listed represent her?
Social
Why is ivy green her favourite colour?
Why are those letters her favourite possession?
History
It might just be a me thing, but I think her background should be in her tab too. It's her story(in a sense).
