forum Can someone critique my character so far
Started by @moss
tune

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@Becfromthedead group

Sure!

  1. Not a character critique, but you accidentally misspelled beginning on the looks page
  2. Motivations- Revenge is a good one, but what does he want revenge for?
  3. I know prejudices are hard to come up with, but if you ever see a pattern in a type of people this character dislikes/gets in fights with more often, add them to the list!
  4. Is Louis good at drawing or photography? Sure, they're both hobbies, but you can have fun with a hobby and be terrible, too
  5. He could use a few more personality traits, maybe more about how he thinks and processes information. I can understand how he acts, but not how he thinks.
  6. Religion- by N/A, do you mean he's atheistic? Agnostic? Distinguishing what you mean by "NA" is important.
  7. On him being a rebel: why is he this way? Is this society dystopian, or is he just a big rule-breaker?
    Overall, your character looks good and is pretty well-balanced. It's just time to fill in more details.

@Lili B

I think this character is really good. There's a good amount of detail on there, and I feel like I know him quite a lot by just reading that. Maybe say what he wants revenge for, because I have no idea, although I'm sure that will be said in the book or something. Does he want revenge for how his parents died (Did someone kill them?) Also, what type of society is he living in? How does moving from a wealthy family to a poor aunt affect him? Feel free to directly message me, cause I'd love to read any first chapters or anything of this.