I made the first draft of this character but I think he should be developed a bit more so that I can use him more complexly in the story he belongs to, I'm looking for some critique and advice!
(It's not super deepened yet so don't go too hard lol)
yeet i'm not great at criticizing but he seems cool! the only thing i'd say so far is (and you might know and just haven't written it on notebook yet) when it says "-Tenses up at mentions of anyone he like/is related to in some way", maybe have an explanation why somewhere? The other mannerisms are somewhat explained when you put anxious/easily startled in his personality, but otherwise ye
hopefully that helps lol
Maybe add more of a backstory. That is how a lot of side characters seem deep and in the story.
yeet I'm not great at criticizing but he seems cool! the only thing I'd say so far is (and you might know and just haven't written it on notebook yet) when it says "-Tenses up at mentions of anyone he like/is related to in some way", maybe have an explanation why somewhere? The other mannerisms are somewhat explained when you put anxious/easily startled in his personality, but otherwise ye
hopefully that helps lol
Yeah as you said I haven't gotten that on here yet lol
Thanks for reminding me though =)
Maybe add more of a backstory. That is how a lot of side characters seem deep and in the story.
Yeah, that's going to go in there as well, I know it needs a little more work though =/
yeet