forum Can someone critique my character?

Started September 18, 2018 by Caboose

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Overall, he's a pretty good character. It sounds like he has some sort of an emotional detachment by the way he uses sarcasm to communicate and is brutally honest to the point of being insensitive. So maybe focus on that too when writing him? It could be a part of his character arc.

About his teleporting, wouldn't it make more sense for him to only be able to teleport to places he's been or seen before? Since he has to focus, you'd think he'd have to visualize where he wants to go? Which would make him teleporting to somewhere he's never been or seen while he dreams a good plot point.

Do Native Americans usually have blue or green eyes?

Since he's a very fidgety character and doesn't have a verbal filter, his friends would probably have to be very patient or chill. It could be a point of conflict in the story. Maybe at a point of high stress his fidgeting will get on someone's nerves. It could be a good way to add tension and develop the relationship between two characters.