forum Can someone critique my character!?

Started March 22, 2018 by Charles

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My character called Spencer Banes. You can find more info here Spencer Banes

Oh no he's not public–I'd love to critique, but could you make him public? Thanks~~! :))

@CinnamonRoll I'm so sorry I forgot! It should be better now

This seems like a good foundation. We'd like to hear more of this characters background, and motivations. Like what happened that ruined acting for him? Was his parents separation hard? Is there a reason he hates loud people, or is it just a preference? Overall it seems like a great start!

Yay!! Okay, here we go. Top down…

Quick note: why is his nickname "Baby Spice?" It's adorable and I hope it gets explained!

Okay, 'white' is fine for a skin tone, but I think of milk. Is it rosy? Olive-toned pale? Freckled? Or is he actually pale as death? (His glasses sound so cute!)

Okay, for motivations, his aspirations are fine, but since you have him listed as the main love interest, are there any motivations there? Does he want to be with the MC? Your one flaw is good and very easy to extrapolate, but I need more. So he's uncomfortable talking about feelings–does he clam up? Does he make stuff up? Maybe he's afraid of failure or shy or something. Just–people have lots of flaws!

For prejudices, maybe a bit more? I understand what you have down, but again, a little more depth would be nice. :)

YES! You have his political inclinations! I'm so proud. I'm so happy. You make me very happy.

NO! Now I'm sad. Damn. See, I understand that you have background down, and that's fine. But it's very helpful to put the backSTORY down as well. That way I know why he likes to read, why he hates acting, why his nickname is Baby Spice. It's just really nice to add an extra dimension to your character!

Overall, he's a really sweet and lovable character that even I would be down to date!!

I hope that this helps you!! :DDD