forum Can somebody please critique my character please??
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@Wry_Wyvern

Looks:
-He's 6'2" and has wings, so I'd expect him to weight a lot more- unless his race is really lightweight compared to humans.
Nature:
-Good mannerisms, could add a bit more of what he does when (insert emotion here)
-No prejudices? People who are stubborn and guarded tend to make snap judgements the most. Prejudices also don't have to be about race or class- for example, he could assume that someone's inferior, competent, or a threat based on their clothing or mannerisms.
-So he has magical talents, but what else? Diplomacy, music, sports, etc. are all good skills to give characters.
-Look at MBTI for personality type.
-"He must always keep up a graceful, and calm act. He speaks to everybody in what his good friends, and best warriors- Darius and Toni - call his 'King Voice'." "Because of his role as ruler of the planet Pydrel, he is very distrusting of anybody who brings up an idea that may harm his people. This leads to him being stubborn, wanting to only come up with his own way of doing things, even if it isn't the best." Based on these things, it seems that he may be hard to relate to (both readers and his own people). For the readers, make sure to have scenes where he's more relaxed and shows more of his emotions and other qualities. For his people, this can create conflict.
I think that's all; good job!

@Mark_Is_Male group

Thank you! I always struggle with the whole prejudices thing.

For the weight, I was kind of going for an Elf, and I knew that as a weird 'god/elf' hybrid-ish, he would be very light, and quite tall, so he can be both quick and quiet while moving around, and the wings are pretty new, so I didn't remember to even think about the weight.

Thanks for that, I am currently working on his whole 'Act' I have already written a few parts, and they are about how he does spend lot's of time at the academy with the children, helping them learn how to control their Magic, and strengths. I was planning on a 'scene' where he does eventually snap, causing him to lose control of his powers, as well as harm a few people, so I was planning on using that to help with his emotions.

Thank you, because I spend LOT'S of time on characters before even putting them on here, and then work on them even more when I put them on. This makes it much easier for me, Thank you! :)