forum Can anyone give a critique of this character
Started by walter
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@M.W.Poel

  1. Go deeper into the description of the body type. Basic things like rectangular are…. easy but I've never once looked at a person and thought 'wow, their body looks like a triangle' unless, you know, they're literally a triangle. This type of description doesn't tell you anything beyond the proportions between hip, waist and shoulder width.
  2. How short is short for their hair?
  3. Is it a rainbow hair? If so is it a horizontal or a vertical rainbow?
  4. Elaborate more on personality type and perhaps think about how it manifests.
  5. Why is being naïve a flaw? How does it affect them and the world around them?

Try to avoid using single words to describe flaws, mannerisms, personality traits, motivations and so on. A single word can be interpreted a thousand ways and tells near to nothing about the character. think about why it is relevant to the subject or how it came to be. How does it manifest and affect the world beyond the character? Or how does it influence the character themselves?