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I made a new character named Ivory who doesn't appear much in my story but will impact the story greatly. I'm just already in LOVE with his backstory but… Just in case there are flaws in his backstory which I think there are, I'd like to hear your critique on him.
Before we got on into the story, here are some things you should know to make things less confusing.
- My story is an alien sci-fi story.
- Seesew is a planet which is the main setting of the story and has its own species. Gesmiea is another planet and also has its own species.
- Ivory can breathe underwater and has anemones that help with his locomotion.
- Alillians are mutant anthromorphic animals. Wulfines aren't alillians but they can inherit alillian genes that'll cause them to be born as an alillian.
- Indigo never bred with a Gesmiean. He's a virgin. His friends are just guessing things.
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Before Ivory was born, here are some details about his momma. His mother was a Gesmiean who lived on Seesew before being taken into captivity. When she got captured, her abusers couldn't figure out what species she is. (Only the government knows about Gesmiean DNA) So they just assumed she was a Wulfine and took her into the "Anti-alillian abuse house" to breed.
Again, her abusers wasn't sure what species she was so they artificially inseminated her with man-made Wulfine sperm. (AND IT WORKED) She got pregnant at the age of 10, along with diseases.
After labor, Ivory was born in captivity with his sister, Vinyl. His mother laments to Indigo on the fact her life ended up this way and her children having no father before succumbing to her sickness. In other words, she died along with Vinyl. Luckily, Ivory survived his diseases.
One day, an anti-humanoid group raided the abuse house to save the trapped alillians. Before Indigo could leave, he spotted Ivory hiding somewhere. Indigo came to get him and they both escaped the abuse house.
Indigo became his not-a-dad dad. Ivory's dad was one of the fewest people who he would be sweet to, so he grew up to be normal.
But the happiness didn't last long. When Ivory found out that Indigo joined the anti-humanoid organization, he started to doubt him and thought about running away.
Unfortunetly, he did when members from the group found out Ivory was mostly Gesmiean. They didn't like that so they cut off his anemones to sabotage his locomotion and brought Indigo over to inform him of Ivory's genetics. They even told Indigo to kill him as a way to torment him for "breeding with a Gesmiean" At first, Indigo was resisting and about to get violent. But then he realized that they're next to a body of water and knew that pushing Ivory into the water was better than attacking his comrades. And so he did which settled everything.
For Ivory, he saw it as betrayal because again, his locomotion was sabotaged which in turn, had him struggle swimming. At least he survived then went off into hiding…
He decide to put in his mind after that experience that he should never reveal his past nor his genetics nor anything personal for he would be in big trouble. Moreover, that he shouldn't trust anyone easily.
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Big thanks to anyone who critiques!!!
