@Emmy
I am open to any kind of critique, and will try to make my work better! :)
I am open to any kind of critique, and will try to make my work better! :)
I'll critique her for ya!
Thank you!
Alright. Here's what I've got.
OVERVIEW
What's her role in her story? No one has a nickname for her?
LOOKS
She's underweight. Maybe add 5 or 10 lbs.
What color is her hair naturally? How long is it when down? What kind of light is her skin tone?
Where are her freckles? Are they numerous, or sparse?
Maybe add in the notes sections whether or not there are any distinct features that set the Fae race apart from humans. Cus I'm assuming she looks like a normal human.
NATURE
Deep breath
Her mannerisms are not mannerisms. They're personality traits. Mannerisms are actions we do without thinking (Ie. Pacing, crossing arms when talking, what their face and/or body does when sad, happy, crying, mad).
Her motivations work, but is there anything further?
No prejudices?
Any other flaws? Fully developed characters usually have several, whether or not they are plot related.
Everyone has at least 3 or 4 talents and hobbies. Even if they are minor or they suck at it in the Hobbies case.
What is her personality?! What's her general mindset and outlook on life? How does she act around others or when by herself? I'd recommend taking a MBTI (Myers Briggs Type Indicator) test to further understand her.
SOCIAL
No friends?
What do you mean by Dairy?
What are her Politics? Those are pretty essential to a character.
No occupation? Unless there's a particular reason, I find it doubtful she wouldn't have a job at 21.
FAMILY
No family? Really?
HISTORY
What was her education before college?
Where is her background? I understand if you're still working on it, but that's pretty important.
Oh, thank you for the mannerisms! I didn't quite know, I just started this website today, and the suggestions said things like quiet. THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)))))))))))))
Oh, Dairy is supposed to say Diary, I must have mistyped lol
NO PROBLEM!!!!!
I can link a MBTI test if you want.
That'd be great!! :)
https://www.16personalities.com/free-personality-test
I've found this one to be most accurate for me and my characters.
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