I'm making some characters for a crime and possibly romance story but I wanted to know if my characters were fleshed out enough? The two I've made so far is the main character Min-Jee, and her brother for a supporting character Dae-Hyun.
First off, Iove your character's names, and I'm curious about how you came up with them. I also love When you say 'also other names because she's a criminal and what not', what are these names? It's good to get specific, especially when it's dealing with the main character's main occupation (though this also goes for his brother). Also, I feel like the guitar and singing hobbies are a little random and don't really pertain to the story. If there's a specific reason that ties in with her past this possibly could be something she does to relate or bring back memories. When you say that she is friendly to those that get on her good side, it sort of off-sets the entire 'I love power and I'm badass' vibe I was getting from her before. Also, when you say she has no religion, that's called being an Atheist. An Atheist is a person who has no belief in any God. Also, if your parents were supporting like you stated in the background section, why would he not tell the parents about anything? But this is a really great buildup to the thieving occupation, so good job! One last thing- I suggest specifically putting their parents in the family section, because I don't think there was every a mentioned name, and because they knew their parent's names I believe it is important just to have off to the side.
thankyou for the feedback Claire! Ill be sure to explain things further and fix things up. With coming up with the names, I just searched up Korean and Chinese names and picked ones that stuck in my head.
Hi!! I think I'm a ~little~ late to the party here, but if I may…
Okay, starting on your male character: top down…
I'm going to be a little contradictory of @Claire here. My personal belief is that little things (like the guitar hobby) make character more human. No one is 2D; almost everyone has a soft side. But on this page–I would recommend revising his prejudices. That 'needs to feel needed' feeling seems more like a personality type to me. Add a group he doesn't like or something instead.
VERY nice job on the backstory for this character. I'm seeing everything tying in here!!
I think that's all I have for him–I'll do my overall at the end. Okay, chica time!
Oh, YES!! THIS is a 3D character. She feels real!! Again, I'm gonna have to contradict @Claire (Sorry!!) I think that the fact that she's kind to people she knows well adds a lot of depth to her character.
Okay, backstory here is a little empty, but I'll comment more on that in the overall….
….which is right here! (yay!) Okay, so REALLY GOOD CHARACTERS. I'd say that their traits are just varied enough to make them human but also really hardcore. The one tip I have is to elaborate on the backstories!! The male character's was much better, but it was still not as ~detailed~ as it could be. The female character's definitely needs more–otherwise those awesome traits have no support system!
I hope this helps you!! :DDD
Thankyou so much @CinnamonRoll! I actually really admire your work and criticism, and I'm honored to have you respond! Thankyou again! I'm currently updating them and their backstories so I'd love if you'd have a look at them again when I'm finished.
Thankyou so much @CinnamonRoll! I actually really admire your work and criticism, and I'm honored to have you respond! Thankyou again! I'm currently updating them and their backstories so I'd love if you'd have a look at them again when I'm finished.
Oh my god thank you so much!!!! I'd love to look at them when you're finished!! :DDD
I've updated them again if u wanted to have a look, thankyou for all your feedback so far!
Yes, yes, YES!! The added backstory details add SO MUCH in explaining your characters' motives and relationships. I feel like I can understand them so much better now!! I especially enjoy the kitten-Rottweiler comparison; that's the ~perfect~ analogy!! Although from what I remember, Min isn't ~so~ frail :P But the lens (looking from Dae's perspective) adds an extra layer to their relationship! SUCH a good job here!! Although I would still ask: Why are they so against the Rose Holding Company? This feels super important. (You might have it down and I just forgot–sorry about that if I did!)
Thank you so much for letting me see your characters!! I love them so much!! :DD
Yes, yes, YES!! The added backstory details add SO MUCH in explaining your characters' motives and relationships. I feel like I can understand them so much better now!! I especially enjoy the kitten-Rottweiler comparison; that's the ~perfect~ analogy!! Although from what I remember, Min isn't ~so~ frail :P But the lens (looking from Dae's perspective) adds an extra layer to their relationship! SUCH a good job here!! Although I would still ask: Why are they so against the Rose Holding Company? This feels super important. (You might have it down and I just forgot–sorry about that if I did!)
Thank you so much for letting me see your characters!! I love them so much!! :DD
Thankyou so much for loving my characters as much as I do! I'm pretty sure that I wrote in Dae-Hyun's backstory (the brother) that the loan sharks that pursued his parents were associated with the Rose Holding Company, and that they followed him up with the debts when he got older, and then they started to mess with Min-Jee's family. But thankyou so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed!
Ohhhhh I remember!! Sorry I have such a terrible memory ;P But again, the backstories are se great!!! :DDD