forum Anyone willing to critique my Protag?

Started January 08, 2019 by @CurtisFamWriters

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Hi! I took a look at your character, and I think I might have some suggestions for you!

I really like the story of a kid possessed by a demon, but Elliot seems like his entire life revolves around the demon inside him. While I'm sure that being possessed is a pretty big part of his life, it would be nice if he had some other interests or talents beyond his possession and/or demon magic, and I believe that it would add to the feeling of a well-rounded character.

His prejudices say that he is prejudiced against royals. Perhaps I am missing something in his backstory, but did something specific happen to make him prejudiced against them? And what does his prejudice entail (does he think they're snooty? not good at running the country? just terrible people in general?)?

These are just my thoughts on your character. You do NOT have to listen to these, as this is just my opinion. Overall, I really like Elliot, but I think you could make his profile stronger by fleshing out these two points a bit. I hope you have a nice day! :)