forum Anyone want to look at my character?

Started May 11, 2018 by @WriterK1018

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She's still in early development, but I'd love some input in the early stages!

Hi! I’d love to help, but your character is still private. If you make it public, let me know, and I’ll critique!

Whoops! Didn't notice that. It should be fixed now!

Ok!

I like her! Just a few things:

1. I am vaguely familiar with the mythology you’re working with, but make sure to intro that in your story so that every reader understands.

2. Her motivation is protecting others, but she’s selfish, which doesn’t add up ;)

That’s it! Happy writing!

Thanks! I'll take that into account!

You say she has average weight and height but those are kind of dependent on each other and the world she's living in. Is there any place where you establish average weight and height?
You should also be careful not to make her OP. Too many strengths and not enough weaknesses can take a lot of excitement out of your story (believe me, I've definitely been guilty of this more than once)

Great character, though. She's different, it isn't the same group of qualities that everyone likes to use for their characters, which is refreshing.

Thanks! I'll try to work on that!