forum Antagonist help/Critic

Started February 19, 2018 by @NoValdezinator

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Is he a good antagonist? And do you like his background?

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Oh thanks

okay…uh. Idk how to critique this. He seems like a stereotypical "adhsjdkhej demons!!" villain. Idk how to judge them because I just can't stand those types of villains. One thing I did notice is that the nature section is confusing and bare?? Like u haven't written anything about him except stuff in a language I don't understand and that his only flaw is he's a Satanist??? that's…boring. give him more of a personality/more flaws, make him more realistic. General villain advice here: if your villain talks about how evil he is/doesn't have a real, human motivation, then he's unrealistic.

Sorry, didn't change that yet. It's because I'm german and tried to translate and make more to get some critic, it's possible I forgot something

Do you think he's better now? (I added a bit to his background and made Nature english and how it was supposed to be)

I kinda agree with @writelikeyourerunningoutoftime, it seems like a great character because they all are great, but he misses human's reasons, why does he want to rule the world so much ? Is it because he is hungry for power ? Only that ? And if it's because of it, what turned him into this ? Maybe you have all of that in mind but in case you haven't, do not forget to think about how deep a character is, it can't be just because he wants something that he is ready to make the world his thing, there must be something that push him to want it or to do it, either it's because no one can rule it, because a demon make a fool of him, because he is sick of seing goodness.. Find your own reasons and ask yourself if you can respond to every question you wonder when you see a vilain, and then you'll have an amazing character ! ;)

Thank you! I will think about it and look what I can do