forum Advice/Opinion/Critique for Characters!

Started November 06, 2021 by @Rover3672

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If you want me to look at something specific or need some general advice on a character this is the place to do so, make sure its public as well please!

Hey! Could you maybe check out Uta? Do you think that his backstory is too dark? If it is, could you tell me? Because I have another backstory that's not as dark if I should change it.

Hey! Could you maybe check out Uta? Do you think that his backstory is too dark? If it is, could you tell me? Because I have another backstory that's not as dark if I should change it.

Hello! First off I love Uta and Im a bit of a sucker for MHA ocs so points in my book. As for his backstory I don’t think it’s too dark at all but I think elaborating on why that villain attacked would be ideal. Like we’re they attacked on purpose or as a part of accident? Are their parents heroes with identities revealed so they were vulnerable? Were they in the wrong place at the wrong time?

Overall a good lad! I am curious about the secondary backstory you mentioned but I think the one you have now is a decent enough balance as long as no one else died during that night.

Awesome! Thanks so much for the feedback!

No problem at all!

Is this still open? If so, could you do my boi Henka? Lemme just warn ya, he is purposefully edgy in my defense xD

Also, I started using the site quite recently so this was written pretty quickly, so please ignore any definitions that weren't explained yet and any grammar/spelling mistakes (also, my native language is not english either, so… sorry for any broken english in my writing). Thanks in advance tho!

Okays of first of all DAMN THAT ART IS GOOD DID YOU DRAW THAT HOLY SHIT??

Second of all I like Henka! Starting off with a few technical notes is that he is VERY underweight, like he shouldn't be alive underweight…Like i'm much shorter then him and at my healthy weight i'm still heavier so I recommend something closer to the 120lbs range but thats me nitpicking.

Also damn I might have competition for who can write the most in the backstory section, but hey I'd rather a long paragraph with details then a short one with barely any. Overall I love the detail and how you explain how things go along during the game, I think you should be more specific with the self harming behavior since when I was reading his backstory I didn't get notes of him going down that path. You did say he sometimes he comedic relief so how is he getting embarrassed in those situations? Does he brush it off or get super flustered/upset? I am curious….

I think its a good start to his character! There aren't any backstory parts that stick out as weird and if is supposed to be edgy I think you really got that! Profiles are hard to edit to suit your own writing style and how much you want to write

OK, I WASN'T EXPECTING A REPLY TBH LMFCLKSELFCMSLCFLSEFLEOI
Thank you so much! Yep, I did draw the art, he's my favorite character to draw lol :]
About him being underweight, well… Let's just say he weights as much as me and we've also got the same height xD I understand what you mean tho, but we exist! It's in fact possible. Also, I did write he was 5'3" / 1,60 m, right? Just making sure I didn't make a typo, I never thought being that underweight was a wild concept so maybe I accidentally wrote him as taller in his page? Lemme know, I gotta fix that!
His self harming behavior os both with… doing… marks, if you know what I mean, as well as substance abuse later on. It started when he was young, using his claws to purposefully scratch his arms and legs until it hurt. I might have left that out bc as I said, I didn't have much time to write things down yet. And the comedic relief part (I DID forget to write that part down, sorry!) is basically with his sarcasm! He cracks some funny-4ss jokes sometimes. Honestly, he does have a funny sense of humour. Self deprecating? Yeah. The kinda thing you know you shouldn't laugh but holy cow, IT WAS C L E V E R. I hope this clears the confusion a bit!
(Ps: yes, he does throw fits and get upset when he's made fun of too, but most of the "comedic relief" per se is just his sarcasm lol)

Is it ok if I sent other characters for you to review later on? I started writing his sister's template, so… yeah , I'd aprecciate some feedback xD

Anyways, thank you so much for reading! I truly aprecciate :]

Its no problem at all!! And of course you can send me more characters I'm happy to look over them! In your page you wrote him down as being 5'3, its just a small nitpicky detail so I wouldn't worry way too much about height to weight ratios.

But still i really love him! Seems like a pretty coolio world you got going on!

Hello!

I was hoping to get some critique on two of my characters, Eilore and Araite! For some context, they are sister Goddesses who work on Earth and were created by The Goddess of Life. They have a brother named Nyaery, but his character profile isn't complete just yet (feel free to check it out tho :P). Also please note the magic system I use is called Kilotai! You don't have to read that section because its pretty lengthy and confusing, but if you would like to be my guest! Thanks a lot :D

The Goddess of Time, Eilore: Eilore

The Goddess of The Sun, Ariate: Araite

(Forgive me for spelling mistakes I tried my best <3)