forum I would like editing help.

Started August 19, 2019 by @Fangirl616 group

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I have a story, its called Theta. Could people give me advice on it? Please?
https://www.inkitt.com/stories/action/340800
Thanks so much in advance!

Okay, so I read through your story, and I have one major advice: elaborate and don't rush. Don't fly through events. I have one example:

So when Theta-616 rushes outside to the sound of gunshots, he recognizes some of the people he knew, but they're dead. When you write that part, it's confusing whether you mean the friendly faces are the intruders or the scientists. Try to elaborate that a bit more? It would help understand on the first read.

I can't copy-paste. I would've done that if I could, but this was one example.

I loved your story!!! I agree it was a bit fast-paced but it really depends on the tone you want to set for a scene. I thought it was a great start to an intriguing story.