Huh.
I will admit the creature I used was pretty creepy. I looked it up myself and got a little freaked out (It's not one I made up myself.)
It's– never mind, you'll hate me for describing it, lol.
But… It is kinda freaky, the way I introduced it to my main character Jeff (and Tony, technically.)
I read a couple pages and it's neither 100% fear nor 100% drama. I think it would help if you worked on more clarity (write a little straight forward, less filler). And show emotion, don't tell it. That's a huge thing. It's way scarier to show emotion than to tell the reader what the character is feeling.
Oof…. Yeah…
It's kinda meh anyways…
There was this thing on telling and showing emotion and feelings, but I can't remember if it was tell feels and show emotion….. Or the other way around…
But that might be something really good…
For a second I thought it was bad not to have either 100% fear or 100% drama despite literally what I just read and I was like… Oh…
But… Yeah… I always have this tendancy to use a ton of filler stuff unfortunately…
Yet, that was my very very first crack at scary stoof, having never read it nor watched it (like that helps at all….)
And thank yeee pickle! (It's so strange to call you that… Do… You happen to have another name I can call you?)
Just call her Lisa. She don't care. :P
:3
Just call her Lisa. She don't care. :P
Uuaah
Thank you (I'll probably forget it anyways, unfortunately…)
Also, heroooahh Gracê :3
Hey Grace!!!
Now that I think about it, I just started playing around with that tragic stuff, and I kinda started crying, and I haven't even written it down…. So…
Unsure what to do anymore…
Hey Grace!!!
Hai y'all!
:'3
Why u sad Tiramisu???
I ain't sad. I'm watching Maleficent with mah fam
Oohah. I always wanted to see that movie? I cant remember if it was a movie…..
I was a bit sad because I was thinking about a tragic thing to write about, and it was so tragic in my mind that I started crying, and I didn't even write it.
…… And yes, it was that sad. But of course…. It was all floof related, so… It was obviously gonna be sad.
(What are we talking about?)
I have no idea.
I was gonna do a sad tragic thing, and then I thought about it and started crying. Yehchna I dunno….
Or we were talking about my horror thingie. Whatever…
(What are we talking about?)
Hei WHISP! :D
Maleficent is a movie, Tiramisu, but I don't think it's very sad (contrary to what most people think). Have you guys ever watched Goodbye Christopher Robin?!?! Not the new Christopher Robin one with the alive animal toys, but a different one. I cried hard when I watched that one. It's the actual STORY of Christopher.
Hm.
I don't think so…
Never seen it, tho Maleficent is a pretty good movie, it's not sad in my opinion
Ah. Okie. :)
Yeah.
(it was so great! a bittersweet sort of happy-sad. It was my first time seeing it and it was lovely.)
Mmh.
Alright then….
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